Thursday, July 7, 2011

Fort Greene Haiku Times Two



The crackle of Rip Van Winkle thunder then a strobe of flash lightning.

White rain blurring the buildings. Rumble overhead. Storm passing eastward.

The foto is the view from my window.

That is not a haiku

And neither are the first two

Haikus consist of two or more separate images. I think I achieved that. I went for 17 instead of 17, which I could cover up easily since I stutter of certain words, but I most assuredly failed on the 5/7/5 phasing, although the stutter could once more save me if I was eloquent.

It's all about nature.

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